Just an observation.
A few days ago I finished a reading a book. (I haven't finished a book all summer.) It was ok, nothing ground-breaking. But I have one complaint.
There was a relationship that developed later in the story. When we frist met the male interest I didn't catch that he was attractive. In fact I thought he was dumpy and yucky. Then later when the relationship develops there is a comment that a random woman is checking out his hottness. Really? He's hot? I had no idea. It was hard to transition that thought.
So, make sure that your characters are clear. Happy writing.
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I've had that happen to me before. I don't remember the book, but I specifically remember reading a story that the main character's hair color changed halfway through. Very strange indeed!
ReplyDeleteIt makes me nervous that I will have inconsistencies in my story with all the rewriting,etc. I have faith that my ace writing group will help me catch them though. ;)
ReplyDeleteOooh that's bothersome! Of course, I get that the main character might not find the main love interest attractive at first; that just makes the love story more interesting. But, we should see the transition clearly from unattractiveness to attractiveness.
ReplyDeleteArlene, I agree. I love the story where you don't see the person's beauty until you get to know them. But this wasn't the case. A stranger was sidetracked by his hotness, yet when I first met him I thought he was fat and middleaged.
ReplyDeleteLinda, your ACE writing group will help all they can.